New Webseries Blue Collar Hustle (SEASON 2 AVAILABLE NOW)

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Tah! I got that Black Panther tee too! :russ:

this was cool tho. real positive.
dropped my favorite Chris Rock line too!

money need to get up off that air mattress tho!
 

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Not bad.

Has potential for sure.

Acting lacks fluidity.

Some parts come off as contrived and mechanical.

Some plot development is needed.

I'll check for the next ep, tho.


Again.

:salute:

this is big...

With some sharpening of some elements, I think you might really have something here.
Acting lacks fluidity.

Some parts come off as contrived and mechanical.

Yes that patr
 

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Good stuff. Too long though. Cut this joint in half and work on your camera filming and lighting and you got something. I can tell you spent time on the writing and it actually shows. But the bad camera work kinda throws everything off.
 
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Cut some of the conversations down a bit but major props to you:salute:


Thank you bro
Good stuff. Too long though. Cut this joint in half and work on your camera filming and lighting and you got something. I can tell you spent time on the writing and it actually shows. But the bad camera work kinda throws everything off.

Episode 1 will be the longest of the season. I had to incorporate the introduction of all relevant characters and now that it's out the way we're full steam ahead!
 

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Salutes to a Coli breh doing the creative work on an independent level. I worked in tv/film production for 4 years, we need more brehs behind the camera and in writers rooms.


:salute:to this being set in Stone Mountain. Rep for that Mainstreet sign

As others said, I think certain scenes could've been shorter. Specifically, the dialogue interviewing the two employees could've been shorter and there were a few continuity errors I saw as well.


Regardless, I'ma still follow along and watch every episode:blessed::blessed:
 
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