Just decided to write a book one day
had always been telling stories in hip hop songs for years anyway 
Started writing a Hip Hop themed fictional book. new chapters 3-29-20!
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had always been telling stories in hip hop songs for years anyway 
Yeah see that's what I'm going to start doing...except with Science Fiction.Just decided to write a book one day
I asked because many people who just start to write books have some sort of background already, either working as a writer somewhere or majoring in English or Journalism in college.
I'm an accountant, I have no background at all lol. I'm going to do it though, something I've been wanting to do for awhile.
I'm a IT professional...when I started writing this I had no outline or anything. Just started writing. I ended up with 32 chapters. I suggest you go for it. keep me updated breh
Neil Tyson
YYZ
He groaned audibly and released his flesh, sinking into the cushions of his computer chair. He reached for his mouse and quickly closed down the object of his pleasure. Jada Stevens' playful grin and semen covered face disappeared in world of 1s and 0s. Kent had a preference for Caucasian women, by far over the women of his own race. African American. He inwardly seethed, remembering the humiliation he endured by the men and women of his own kind.
"The tryna ruin my reputation, man..." He muttered gritting his teeth, he ignored the increasing dampness of his trousers. "Why does the world hate me so much." A click from his bookmark brought him to TheColi. He was very familiar with the message board, a white interface with several subforums such as the Locker Room which he browsed religiously. He registered under a very inconspicuous name in an effort to blend in with the other black users of the board, he used vocabulary such as "cac" and "bedwench" which increased his forum 'rep' greatly.
I dunno, I felt like writing something.
"The tryna ruin my reputation, man..." He muttered gritting his teeth, he ignored the increasing dampness of his trousers. "Why does the world hate me so much." A click from his bookmark brought him to TheColi. He was very familiar with the message board, a white interface with several subforums such as the Locker Room which he browsed religiously. He registered under a very inconspicuous name in an effort to blend in with the other black users of the board, he used vocabulary such as "cac" and "bedwench" which increased his forum 'rep' greatly.
I dunno, I felt like writing something.
He groaned audibly and released his flesh, sinking into the cushions of his computer chair. He reached for his mouse and quickly closed down the object of his pleasure. Jada Stevens' playful grin and semen covered face disappeared in world of 1s and 0s. Kent had a preference for Caucasian women, by far over the women of his own race. African American. He inwardly seethed, remembering the humiliation he endured by the men and women of his own kind.
"The tryna ruin my reputation, man..." He muttered gritting his teeth, he ignored the increasing dampness of his trousers. "Why does the world hate me so much." A click from his bookmark brought him to TheColi. He was very familiar with the message board, a white interface with several subforums such as the Locker Room which he browsed religiously. He registered under a very inconspicuous name in an effort to blend in with the other black users of the board, he used vocabulary such as "cac" and "bedwench" which increased his forum 'rep' greatly.
I dunno, I felt like writing something.
Eternally Jaded
Superstar
U need to work on your dialogue structure.
When Wolves So Will - Frosted_King85 - A Song of Ice and Fire - George R. R. Martin [Archive of Our Own]
This is a fanfiction I'm currently working on. The name of the game is showing not telling.
Learn to write fanfiction, as it helps with character motivation and story telling.
There's definitely promise here though.
When Wolves So Will - Frosted_King85 - A Song of Ice and Fire - George R. R. Martin [Archive of Our Own]
This is a fanfiction I'm currently working on. The name of the game is showing not telling.
Learn to write fanfiction, as it helps with character motivation and story telling.
There's definitely promise here though.
Disgustya Stallone
Man Who Owns 2 Microwaves
when is your girl gonna make an appearance?
You never know who might turn upwhen is your girl gonna make an appearance?
It's already an appearance by a dusty a-rab
wild cherry blossom
lalalalala
You need to work in how you word your story because the flow is weird.
You go from talking slang and normal language to talking all proper.
You go from talking slang and normal language to talking all proper.
the slang is only incorporated when the characters are "actually" speaking.
wild cherry blossom
lalalalala
I get it but it reads weird to have the character speaking in his voice then to have a narrator jump in speaking all proper and describing everything in extra detail.
how would a "narrator" speak. Serious question...have you read a lot of books? I had to do a short bid recently and I read A LOT of books just to see how other writers phrase their shyt and I the majority do the same thing when phrasing the dialect.
wild cherry blossom
lalalalala
Serious answer yes I have read a lot I books and what I'm saying is your narration sounds weird.
It does not fit with the story in my opinion.
The transition from narrator to character is not smooth it's choppy and fukks up the Flo as I'm reading.
The words you use sound big and sophisticated but its not a natural way of speaking.
I don't need a narrator telling me" that there is a inconspicuous individual dressed in black with a sinister look in his eyes." It sounds weird to me because no one speaks like that.
I actually read a book on amazon where this guy's book had a narrator and it sounds like he googled descriptive words or was using a dictionary.
I respect what you are saying but I do NOT agree with the bolded.
BlackDroog
All Star
sub