FruitOfTheVale
Superstar
https:// audiomack .com/album/nodotwon/untitled-unreleased
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Rate & critique my new EP demo ----> NoDotWon x Piris Reis (@nahnah) - "NoDotted Lines"
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https:// audiomack .com/album/nodotwon/untitled-unreleased
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What y'all end up thinking of the project?
Got you when I get to the house.
FruitOfTheVale
Superstar
If you like lyrical shyt and especially if you never heard none of my music before I definitely wanna know what you think about this EP!
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Will give a listen
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Black Royalty
Track 1 - Nice. Delivery & beat gives me a Jay Rock/Schoolboy Q vibe
Track 2 - Dope. Like the slow/eerie part of the production
Track 3- Smooth instrumental, dope rap, very “Hip-Hop”
Track 4 - Dope. I hear some Earl Sweatshirt influence in the flow
Track 5 - Beat is super dope. Has a reflective feel to it. The lyrics and flow are dope but I think maybe you should tone down your inflection a bit to match the beat’s vibe perfectly.
Track 6 - quick dope track. not much to add
Track 7- ill joint. One of the strongest in terms of lyrical content
Track 8- Didn’t really care for this joint as it started but about a minute in when you started telling your story, my opinion changed
Track 9 - Eh...I could do without this one lol
Track 10- This joint hard. Smooth and gritty at the same time. Like something I could hear 50 or mid 2000s Dr. Dre rapping over
Track 11- Cool closing joint. Fits the dark gritty tempo of some of the EP’s best joints.
Overall, this is solid. You got a lot of potential and your voice is your strength in terms of your tempo and inflection. Alot of times, guys who are just starting out sound like they stumbled into the booth with a gun to their head. You sound like you know you belong in there. Keep grinding fam and experimenting on different production styles. Salute.
@FruitOfTheVale this is dope
FruitOfTheVale
Superstar
FruitOfTheVale
Superstar
Faded, banging this in the truck right now...
I'll be back when I can be constructive, but right now I'm groovin off it..
Real talk I'm waiting on the day I hear my own shyt in traffic and I don't even know who tf slappin it... 
Much love!
Ukbrotha
Superstar
I'll give it a listen.
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This the demo of my new EP, if you got 20 minutes to spare over the weekend lmk what you think
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Good luck in your artistic pursuits, and I respect you for seeking honest feedback.
Having said all that, let's go to the judges' cards
1. Beat =9, not feeling the lyrics
2. Beat =5
3. Beat = 5
4. Beat = 6
5. Beat=5
6. Beat= 4
7. Beat =10
8. Beat = 5
9. Beat = 9
10. Beat = 5
11. Beat =7
My problem with this demo is that it feels like a collection of songs, not an album(or extended player). For at least 7 of the songs, the beat starts and you're rapping bars within 15 seconds. You switched it up a few times with the hook being said first, and then the lyrics.
For an album with one person carrying the vocals, I think you should switch it up more, have a different voice doing the hooks, or add skits or a theme that holds the entire album together. Even slightly switching the beat between bars and hooks.
The way this demo is, things are too monotonous.
FruitOfTheVale
Superstar
Good luck in your artistic pursuits, and I respect you for seeking honest feedback.
Having said all that, let's go to the judges' cards
1. Beat =9, not feeling the lyrics
2. Beat =5
3. Beat = 5
4. Beat = 6
5. Beat=5
6. Beat= 4
7. Beat =10
8. Beat = 5
9. Beat = 9
10. Beat = 5
11. Beat =7
My problem with this demo is that it feels like a collection of songs, not an album(or extended player). For at least 7 of the songs, the beat starts and you're rapping bars within 15 seconds. You switched it up a few times with the hook being said first, and then the lyrics.
For an album with one person carrying the vocals, I think you should switch it up more, have a different voice doing the hooks, or add skits or a theme that holds the entire album together. Even slightly switching the beat between bars and hooks.
The way this demo is, things are too monotonous.
Very interesting feedback
definitely a different perspective from what's already been said. I appreciate that you elaborated on what you meant, I see your point
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Veteran
The feedback is going to reflect regional and age differences of the members here.Very interesting feedback
Again, I respect you for seeking out feedback.
Don't alter how you create music, because it's artistic expression. What I was saying is that when you listen to great solo albums, the way the songs are sequenced and the way the executive producer held everything together plays a big part in making it a great album.
What’s good my guy? I must say this...
Lyrically and flow wise you were on point. There wasn’t a whack verse at all. 5/5. For real your pen is great. The quality has really increased from your last project. You must be using a different engineer?
this project is real great. No cap. I hope everyone here listens with an open mind.
if you’re looking for something other than the top 40 and some good underground hip hop this is it
Lyrically and flow wise you were on point. There wasn’t a whack verse at all. 5/5. For real your pen is great. The quality has really increased from your last project. You must be using a different engineer?
this project is real great. No cap. I hope everyone here listens with an open mind.
if you’re looking for something other than the top 40 and some good underground hip hop this is it
FruitOfTheVale
Superstar
I engineered it myself, I learned a lot between the last project and this one
That being said I'm no engineer lol and there's a lot of room for improvement, I'm gon invest in a professional mix/master around the end of the month.Appreciate what you said though bruh, I set out to make a better project than my last one and from all the feedback I got, I definitely did that
