My novel. Updates on 1st and 3rd pages

Neuromancer

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A Villa Straylight.
I like the story, just the little bit you posted kept me engaged and I appreciate that.

The part about the crying on her lap about her grandfather...something felt off. But maybe that's because I don't know how much the grandfather meant for the character breh.:manny:
Sorry there's more it wasn't his grandpa but what the death meant. will post one more part.
 
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