Summery:
1. At this point in the writing pipeline the writing team takes the segments of the "experiences timeline" defined earlier as "acts" and describes how the story connects the different experiences that makeup the gameplay plot points.
2. One video where we discus possible changes to make in the setup(backstory) that will allow for a more expansive setting to work in.
Set Up
Deep in space there lies a planet whose surface is completely covered in water. It is known as Nun. Though the planet itself is uninhabitable, the two moons that orbit it, Isis and Osiris, are home to diverse and industrial populations. On Osiris is the Serekh group. They are a corporation which creates entheo-black, a substance which essentially turns one into a living dead. The inhabitants of this moon have become addicted to entheo-black. They call themselves the Blessed, and have dedicated themselves to Serekh with religious zeal. Also on Osiris is a race of aliens who came to the moon centuries ago known as the Sphinx. They serve as a major fighting force for Serekh. On Isis is the Scorpio mining company, which mines resinium, the most sought after material on the two moons. Only Isis has a vast enough supply to be mined, and the Scorpio mining company has a monopoly over it. Resinium is used to power new technology, and it is the main component of entheo-black. Also on Isis are Harkhebi Research, a company who is constantly developing new technology; and the Ibis, a group of mercenaries under contract by Scorpio. With the monopoly on resinium, Scropio controls both Harkhebi and Ibis, along with all trade on both moons. But with the shift of the moons alignment, how long will their control last…
Prequel: Growing Tensions in Trade
Over the past decade Scorpio has increased the price for resinium, making it harder for the Serekh group to continue producing its vast amounts of entheo-black for the masses. Their board has decided to enter into negotiations with Scorpio in order to bring down the price of resinium in exchange for a percentage of entheo-black to be traded in order for Scorpio to sell to the population of Isis. Scropio’s board has seen the effect entheo-black has had on the Blessed, and knows of the religious zeal it has created within them. They fear that if they were to agree to the deal, the dispersal of entheo-black amongst the inhabitants of Isis would lead to the same religious zeal, and all loyalty will be given to Serekh. Therefore they decline Serekh’s offer and the price remains the same. Enraged by Scorpio’s refusal, Serekh decides they must take action. They begin to call upon the Blessed and the Sphinx to amass a force to invade Isis and take over the resinium trade. Ibis spies on Osiris catch wind of Serekh’s plans and report them to Scorpio. Scorpio calls on the aid that is owed to them by Harkhebi and Ibis to build a force of their own to counter the invasion. As an appointed officer of the Isis force, Vando is a Set (one of the personal soldiers of Scorpio), must begin training with all soldiers (Set), mercenaries (Ibis), and prototype heavy armored fighters of Harkhebi (Scarabs).
Act I: Nun Awakens, Change of Plans
As both Serekh and Scorpio work to amass and train their forces the moons begin to align with the poles of Nun. As a result a massive gravitational force builds up at the poles, causing all the water at the equator to shift towards the poles, revealing massive amounts of land. For years the Blessed have watched Nun as part of their religious practice, and they notice the new landmass. They send a scouting ship to the planet, which discovers a myriad amount of resinium buried deep in the ground. When the report returns Serekh decides to instead send its forces down to Nun instead of to invade Isis. When the Ibis spies find out about the redirect of Osiris forces they report back to Scorpio. The board realizes that if Serekh mines enough resinium, Scorpio will lose its monopoly and profits will plummet. They decide to send their forces down to Nun and eradicate the Osiris force, as well as to mine as much resinium as possible to add to their stores. Once the force has landed, Rozel, an Ibis Scout is sent out to survey the land and report back what she finds about the Osiris force’s positions.
Writing Team meeting:
The meeting lasted longer: (power ran out on the camera)
The Writing Team sits down to make some changes to the story. At this point we had the outline of experiences and the point where the gametypes(experiences) are placed in the plot line. Now we are filling out the details of the story proper on how one point in an ACTs plot line leads to the next. After this we can drill down on the dialogue that happens after completing any given experience listed in the plot line.
The story was Matt's baby and after completing a first draft of the Setup, Prequel, and ACT 1 he stops; coming to the conclusion that while he likes his story he doesn't feel that it offers enough room for gameplay. I gave the same feedback posted prior, that there are areas where gameplay could go that offers more room for gameplay such as ACT 4. I also mention as pointed out in the previous post that the game is turning into an "us vs them" story instead of multiple factions vying for control as originally proposed in the premise. We then come up with a new back story and setup that allows for the expanded gameplay options I proposed.
1. At this point in the writing pipeline the writing team takes the segments of the "experiences timeline" defined earlier as "acts" and describes how the story connects the different experiences that makeup the gameplay plot points.
2. One video where we discus possible changes to make in the setup(backstory) that will allow for a more expansive setting to work in.
Set Up
Deep in space there lies a planet whose surface is completely covered in water. It is known as Nun. Though the planet itself is uninhabitable, the two moons that orbit it, Isis and Osiris, are home to diverse and industrial populations. On Osiris is the Serekh group. They are a corporation which creates entheo-black, a substance which essentially turns one into a living dead. The inhabitants of this moon have become addicted to entheo-black. They call themselves the Blessed, and have dedicated themselves to Serekh with religious zeal. Also on Osiris is a race of aliens who came to the moon centuries ago known as the Sphinx. They serve as a major fighting force for Serekh. On Isis is the Scorpio mining company, which mines resinium, the most sought after material on the two moons. Only Isis has a vast enough supply to be mined, and the Scorpio mining company has a monopoly over it. Resinium is used to power new technology, and it is the main component of entheo-black. Also on Isis are Harkhebi Research, a company who is constantly developing new technology; and the Ibis, a group of mercenaries under contract by Scorpio. With the monopoly on resinium, Scropio controls both Harkhebi and Ibis, along with all trade on both moons. But with the shift of the moons alignment, how long will their control last…
Prequel: Growing Tensions in Trade
Over the past decade Scorpio has increased the price for resinium, making it harder for the Serekh group to continue producing its vast amounts of entheo-black for the masses. Their board has decided to enter into negotiations with Scorpio in order to bring down the price of resinium in exchange for a percentage of entheo-black to be traded in order for Scorpio to sell to the population of Isis. Scropio’s board has seen the effect entheo-black has had on the Blessed, and knows of the religious zeal it has created within them. They fear that if they were to agree to the deal, the dispersal of entheo-black amongst the inhabitants of Isis would lead to the same religious zeal, and all loyalty will be given to Serekh. Therefore they decline Serekh’s offer and the price remains the same. Enraged by Scorpio’s refusal, Serekh decides they must take action. They begin to call upon the Blessed and the Sphinx to amass a force to invade Isis and take over the resinium trade. Ibis spies on Osiris catch wind of Serekh’s plans and report them to Scorpio. Scorpio calls on the aid that is owed to them by Harkhebi and Ibis to build a force of their own to counter the invasion. As an appointed officer of the Isis force, Vando is a Set (one of the personal soldiers of Scorpio), must begin training with all soldiers (Set), mercenaries (Ibis), and prototype heavy armored fighters of Harkhebi (Scarabs).
Act I: Nun Awakens, Change of Plans
As both Serekh and Scorpio work to amass and train their forces the moons begin to align with the poles of Nun. As a result a massive gravitational force builds up at the poles, causing all the water at the equator to shift towards the poles, revealing massive amounts of land. For years the Blessed have watched Nun as part of their religious practice, and they notice the new landmass. They send a scouting ship to the planet, which discovers a myriad amount of resinium buried deep in the ground. When the report returns Serekh decides to instead send its forces down to Nun instead of to invade Isis. When the Ibis spies find out about the redirect of Osiris forces they report back to Scorpio. The board realizes that if Serekh mines enough resinium, Scorpio will lose its monopoly and profits will plummet. They decide to send their forces down to Nun and eradicate the Osiris force, as well as to mine as much resinium as possible to add to their stores. Once the force has landed, Rozel, an Ibis Scout is sent out to survey the land and report back what she finds about the Osiris force’s positions.
Writing Team meeting:
The meeting lasted longer: (power ran out on the camera)
The Writing Team sits down to make some changes to the story. At this point we had the outline of experiences and the point where the gametypes(experiences) are placed in the plot line. Now we are filling out the details of the story proper on how one point in an ACTs plot line leads to the next. After this we can drill down on the dialogue that happens after completing any given experience listed in the plot line.
The story was Matt's baby and after completing a first draft of the Setup, Prequel, and ACT 1 he stops; coming to the conclusion that while he likes his story he doesn't feel that it offers enough room for gameplay. I gave the same feedback posted prior, that there are areas where gameplay could go that offers more room for gameplay such as ACT 4. I also mention as pointed out in the previous post that the game is turning into an "us vs them" story instead of multiple factions vying for control as originally proposed in the premise. We then come up with a new back story and setup that allows for the expanded gameplay options I proposed.
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