The melodies are good, the instrumental is good. My critique would be the engineering (I dont know if your non autotuned vocals need more reverb, or compression of something but they kind of sound flat. Im no expert but it doesn't sound as polished as it could.)
As a new artist, you should make music that gives people an idea of who you are. Tell a specific story about what you going through with your women, not some general (these women do this or that. I want to do this or that" but tell a real story, we dated, I made this mistake, I got caught this way, I was cheated on by this chick who did this specific thing. I think this will set you apart. Im no expert but I would suggest giving out free downloads in your local area only so that people get to know you and after a year or two they may want to actually pay you to do club walk throughs or performances. Lock down your local area then lock down neighboring areas.
