Colored People webseries (Directed & written by Coli member ghostwriterx) EP04 is up!

[Bruce Wayne]

I'd like to see Episode 2 because Episode 1 was Good.

 

[Dwolf]

Colored tho

 

[ℒℴѵℯJay ELECTUA]

Yo the black dude looks like a current Muhammad Ali. .lol

 

[ltheghost]

Good Job. Keep it up!

 

[Jax]

I could see this on some The Office steez.

 

[malbaker86]

checking this out this evening

 

[SlowPaceThrillah]

That was pretty good. The editing and direction were really on point, they maintained the pace and hit the right beats for the script, which I also thought had great rhythm to the dialogue. All your actors seem really solid as well. The musical cues worked well.

My only criticism was that Evan and Jada, while having good comedy chemistry kinda felt like mouthpieces a little bit as their interactions weren't really grounded in a dramatic situation, and if there's not enough neutral dialogue interspersed with the racial humour then there's a danger of the show having a kind of functional comic strip vibe to the writing with jokes at the expense of character development and world building.

That said, you didn't run into any of that in the lift scene. My favourite bit was when the hispanic girl did the daisy duke impression for the intercom. It seems like you've got a nice mixture of voices/perspectives with the different characters so I'll be interested to see where that goes. Word to the wise tho, you already blew your indians and curry material so you'll need to mix it up with the asian stereotypes from here on.

All in all tho really good effort that looked and felt professional.

Can I ask what kind of budget you had and how long it's taken you to write and produce?

 

[Larry Lobster]

6.5/10
I don't know if @ghostwriterx wrote it but it's lacking a lot... i feel like i watched it already, its like who wrote it took the same jokes from other black movies and put it in the script...
But i think for the average person out there(the target audience) its ok

 

[hotbeezie]

I like it ._. It has potential

will pos rep

 

[Larry Lobster]

Yo the black dude looks like a current Muhammad Ali. .lol

Actually he looks like Paul Mooney

 

[tmonster]

I am really impressed and glad that you guys are creating this supportive ecosystem for creativity
may watch later

 

[the artist known az]

I liked it

 

[steadyrighteous]

@ghostwriterx already knows my thoughts and has my support. Glad to see this stickied

 

[HALLOWEEN]

I'll watch when I go home...


So far I like the criticism people are leaving. Doesn't sound like they're hating and they seem to genuinely want to help.


The Coli

 

[Lord Piffington]

this was nice breh! @ghostwriterx I´ll mos def watch next week too.. until then have this dap and rep