Rate & critique my new EP demo ----> NoDotWon x Piris Reis (@nahnah) - "NoDotted Lines"

[FruitOfTheVale]

Due The Most - I could hear thi sneaking into a few playlists quiet as kept, had to hit the

Truly - Most interesting flip of that record yet .....

Dreamcatchers - @FruitOfTheVale @nahnah......family this shyt right here

Got A Plot - You need to finish this

Stop The Show - Nice use of ______ coli fam seem to have similar taste sonically

@FruitOfTheVale

Will give this a spin properly later, this isn't just some shyt you throw on, I'm not going to complain about levels though, as you've pointed out you're gonna get it mixed, mastered etc..

Breh @nahnah legit a beast w/ the flips

As far as "Got A Plot" there's a special guest on that one... I ain't gon reveal who tho

 

[FruitOfTheVale]

Sup with all my coli folks... This a brand new project I've been working on for a little less than a year now. The breh @nahnah handled 90% of the production on this, I'm the rapper. Best way I can describe the sound on this project is a little old school & somewhat experimental with the emphasis being on dope samples and dope lyrics.

I'm looking for constructive feedback about the track order, song choice, flow of the album, what you think are standouts, etc. I plan on getting this professionally mixed and mastered by the end of the month but I'm open to suggestions in the meantime before I let it go. The songs that are labeled "incomplete" are missing some feature verses that will be finished in a couple weeks, otherwise though the song structure and etc. is in place. There's a couple mixing ideas that I'm not skilled enough to implement on certain songs that will be on the final version.

Much love for listening to and critiquing my first project I dropped last year, I truly believe this is a much stronger project through and through (with 1000% better mixing lol) and is definitely worth your time

If the audiomack link is "broken" try refreshing the page, it's a known issue that is usually fixed by doing that.

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[producingfire]

Sup with all my coli folks... This a brand new project I've been working on for a little less than a year now. The breh @nahnah handled 90% of the production on this, I'm the rapper. Best way I can describe the sound on this project is a little old school & somewhat experimental with the emphasis being on dope samples and dope lyrics.

I'm looking for constructive feedback about the track order, song choice, flow of the album, what you think are standouts, etc. I plan on getting this professionally mixed and mastered by the end of the month but I'm open to suggestions in the meantime before I let it go. The songs that are labeled "incomplete" are missing some feature verses that will be finished in a couple weeks, otherwise though the song structure and etc. is in place. There's a couple mixing ideas that I'm not skilled enough to implement on certain songs that will be on the final version.

Much love for listening to and critiquing my first project I dropped last year, I truly believe this is a much stronger project through and through (with 1000% better mixing lol) and is definitely worth your time

If the audiomack link is "broken" try refreshing the page, it's a known issue that is usually fixed by doing that.

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this hits. The drums on each beat are crazy. Rhymes are on point.

 

[FruitOfTheVale]

this hits. The drums on each beat are crazy. Rhymes are on point.

Respect! If you don't mind me asking, which tracks stood out to you? Were there any you thought were out of place or not good enough to make the final EP?

 

[Mowgli]

Bout to lock in and listen to this.

The Bose headphones is on so I'm not fukkin around

 

[PlainSight]

I enjoyed this. The beats were relaxing and provided good contrast to your voice. Lyrics were very clever. Nice solid listen. No skips.

My favorite tracks on this were "You Know Who You Are", "Got a Plot" and "Truly" (in that order).

 

[Mowgli]

Highs
Rakim
Truly
Payback
Got a plot
Dreamcatcher
You know who you are
Outro

Lows

The chorus for stop the show is horrific along with whatever was going on with the drums during the chorus. No no no

Sound quality
Alot better

Beats themelves
Can't say I really wanted to skip any of the songs here but that chorus on stop the show made me do it.

Rhyme structure
Professional level . The way the rhymes are chiming here has improved. No Dr Seuss mother goose.

Cadence's
The same vocal cadence is used so much I feel like I could imitate you now. More and more rhying is needed to further cement the style. Sounds like ur still getting comfortable with the cadence. The flows them selves are straight. Took pusha ts yuuchk adlib though.

Improvements?
The way you say your rhymes could be improved along with the stanzas your writing.
The rhyme structure and flow is on point I feel the actual content of the rhymes could be improved to become more I'll.

Overall it's a solid project that I'll listen to again and I feel if you can keep the production at this level and greater along with some better lyrics you could develop a strong following to eat from

Good work

 

[FruitOfTheVale]

Highs
Rakim
Truly
Payback
Got a plot
Dreamcatcher
You know who you are
Outro

Lows

The chorus for stop the show is horrific along with whatever was going on with the drums during the chorus. No no no

Sound quality
Alot better

Beats themelves
Can't say I really wanted to skip any of the songs here but that chorus on stop the show made me do it.

Rhyme structure
Professional level . The way the rhymes are chiming here has improved. No Dr Seuss mother goose.

Cadence's
The same vocal cadence is used so much I feel like I could imitate you now. More and more rhying is needed to further cement the style. The ows the selves are straight. Took pusha ts yuuchk adlib.

Improvements?
The way you say your rhymes could be improved along with the stanzas your writing.
The rhyme structure and flow is on point I feel the actual content of the rhymes could be improved to become more I'll.

Overall it's a solid project that I'll listen to again and I feel if you can keep the production at this level and greater along with some better lyrics you could develop a strong following to eat from

Good work

Now that's great feedback!

Yeah I need to change that hook, don't know what the new approach will be yet but 100% agree on that.

The point about cadence is taken too, it's hard to visualize how you sound to others (and especially when you heard the songs 100s of times) but I see where you coming from with that.

Appreciate the in-depth review bruh it's definitely gon be helpful while I'm polishing this up

 

[FruitOfTheVale]

I enjoyed this. The beats were relaxing and provided good contrast to your voice. Lyrics were very clever. Nice solid listen. No skips.

My favorite tracks on this were "You Know Who You Are", "Got a Plot" and "Truly" (in that order).

Much love!

 

[Mowgli]

Now that's great feedback!

Yeah I need to change that hook, don't know what the new approach will be yet but 100% agree on that.

The point about cadence is taken too, it's hard to visualize how you sound to others (and especially when you heard the songs 100s of times) but I see where you coming from with that.

Appreciate the in-depth review bruh it's definitely gon be helpful while I'm polishing this up

Its like when you talk to someone you don't always say words the exact same way. When you rhyme, the tone you use is similar. Best way I can describe is like the many ways tone can change when a person uses the word fukk in various ways.

fukk - like I just lost 50k on a horse race
fukk - while fukking
fukk - like a stereotypical Italian saying fawk youuuuuu
fukk - like you just witnessed a bystander getting their head blown off and you're hiding behind a tree

Tone changes add character but making them sound natural is the challenging part
I think it just takes alot of practice.

 

[hex]

Gonna spin this in my free time breh. Good looking out.

Fred.

 

[LauderdaleBoss]

1. Rahkim - song was ok. Sounds more like an interlude than an intro. Beat was ok, nothing really stood out to me like that. Flow was on some daffy duck suffering succatash type shyt. Like its unique, but it don't be vibing with me like that and I feel like it takes away from the actual bars you spitting.

2. Due the Most - chorus was catchy. the flow on this one is better. i liked the bars and the subject on this one, they lowkey made the song, cuz the beat was average.

3. Truly - this the 1st song that I actually liked so far. beat is dope. mellow chill shyt. scratches were a nice add. You don't try to force that unique flow of yours and kinda just ride the track so the bars and shyt just flow effortlessly. Like your style is real balanced on this one. good shyt.

4. Snai Rhymes - beat on this one is dope. like Truly, u spitting on this one and not letting the flow runaway with the song like how the 1st track was. 2nd song on here I liked, but Truly still better.

5. Payback - Beat is dope on this one. has a nice vibe too it. You sounding more balanced now. Its like the project found its lil sweet spot imo. You flowing and spitting on this one.

6. Got a Plot - you spitting on this one. beat is cool, not as dope as the previous 3 but it does the job. song ends up being good.

7. Dreamcatchers - this one aight. beats cool. Started losing me on the flow again so the bars didn't resonate with him me like that.

8. You know who - this beat is dope. I just don't like the flow on this one like that. Kinda killed the story for me.

9. Stop the show - beat is ok. not really feeling this one. voice not really a fit for that type of chorus.

10. Take it -beat was cool, vibe was different on sombeat was cool, vibe was different on some dark dreamy shyt. You spitting on this one. Voice reminds me of sauce money.

11. Change - beat was dope. you spitting on this one. got some emotion in ya delivery on this one which helped the song. made it have that soulful feel.

My fav songs or what I thought were your best tracks....
Truly, Snai Rhymes, Payback, and Change.

I feel like those showcase your style at its true potential. Overall I feel like you battling it out with your bars and flow/delivery. When you start flowing a certain way, your bar delivery takes a hit and the song loses me.

 

[FruitOfTheVale]

1. Rahkim - song was ok. Sounds more like an interlude than an intro. Beat was ok, nothing really stood out to me like that. Flow was on some daffy duck suffering succatash type shyt. Like its unique, but it don't be vibing with me like that and I feel like it takes away from the actual bars you spitting.

2. Due the Most - chorus was catchy. the flow on this one is better. i liked the bars and the subject on this one, they lowkey made the song, cuz the beat was average.

3. Truly - this the 1st song that I actually liked so far. beat is dope. mellow chill shyt. scratches were a nice add. You don't try to force that unique flow of yours and kinda just ride the track so the bars and shyt just flow effortlessly. Like your style is real balanced on this one. good shyt.

4. Snai Rhymes - beat on this one is dope. like Truly, u spitting on this one and not letting the flow runaway with the song like how the 1st track was. 2nd song on here I liked, but Truly still better.

5. Payback - Beat is dope on this one. has a nice vibe too it. You sounding more balanced now. Its like the project found its lil sweet spot imo. You flowing and spitting on this one.

6. Got a Plot - you spitting on this one. beat is cool, not as dope as the previous 3 but it does the job. song ends up being good.

7. Dreamcatchers - this one aight. beats cool. Started losing me on the flow again so the bars didn't resonate with him me like that.

8. You know who - this beat is dope. I just don't like the flow on this one like that. Kinda killed the story for me.

9. Stop the show - beat is ok. not really feeling this one. voice not really a fit for that type of chorus.

10. Take it -beat was cool, vibe was different on sombeat was cool, vibe was different on some dark dreamy shyt. You spitting on this one. Voice reminds me of sauce money.

11. Change - beat was dope. you spitting on this one. got some emotion in ya delivery on this one which helped the song. made it have that soulful feel.

My fav songs or what I thought were your best tracks....
Truly, Snai Rhymes, Payback, and Change.

I feel like those showcase your style at its true potential. Overall I feel like you battling it out with your bars and flow/delivery. When you start flowing a certain way, your bar delivery takes a hit and the song loses me.

Damn hit me with the track by track and everything Respect bro I hear what you saying loud and clear about delivery. It's interesting that most of the ones you liked are among the most recent tracks I knocked out for the project, I definitely feel like I got better between now and when I started working on it.

I appreciate the breakdowns a lot, it gives me some things to think about before I turn it in.

 

[FruitOfTheVale]

My new EP in the OP, lmk what y'all think!

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[the cac mamba]

truly & you know who were the best songs