Please comment with your thoughts. I'm not a poet or a rapper. This is only my second time trying to write a rhyme, but I was deeply inspired by a girl I was falling in love with, so I decided to challenge my creative writing abilities. Thanks in advance for reading.
Black Diamond
Sweet caramel, I might as well tell its real swell that you’re rarer than flip cells
Verizon, or is it her-eyes-in the depths of my mind’s eye?
SPRINTing through my soul as I watch the time drive by?
Maybe, so I wrote it
I’m not poet so I know that Ima blow it
I shoulda spoke it, but in my defense I get tense around you
Black diamond but your soul's in the hue of a sky blue
I heard a rumor through the words of a Spaniard
That you wear your soul round your heart on a lanyard
And stretch minds like suspenders of nerds with your fine words
Maybe Kel can relate if you took him on a dinner date
And miracles of science provide the orange bliss
Of a tangerine served on an orange soda flavored dish plate
And thank God for your brown eyes
Bless your momma but no love for azul, why?
Cuz I love the African in your proud veins
Moving blood to a heart like Bruce Wayne’s
I know it’s rude and I guess that I’m a wise guy
Gentleman, but I wonder what's your bra size?
Man, I guess cuz I’m a damn man
But understand if I can its my plan to be your number 1 fan
Like a groupie at a rock show, or a Rican singing J. Lo
Your beauty comes together like one plus nine
Fine, I guess that makes sense, huh?
A DIME-ond, I guess that makes cents, huh?
Did you see how I implied that you’re a 10?
I would’ve loved to see the very moment when
God created you, then maybe I’d have a rhyme or a clue
To solving the mystery that’s you.
You…you fighter shining brighter than the most brilliant of lighters
Might her soul have been bred/bread from a different place?
In the upperCRUST of our outer space?
You know I’ve thought something stupider
Maybe you’re just visiting from Jupiter…
I think I found the right timing
To put a stop to this silly rhyming
But I will say with the authority of Simon
I love me a big Black Diamond
Black Diamond
Sweet caramel, I might as well tell its real swell that you’re rarer than flip cells
Verizon, or is it her-eyes-in the depths of my mind’s eye?
SPRINTing through my soul as I watch the time drive by?
Maybe, so I wrote it
I’m not poet so I know that Ima blow it
I shoulda spoke it, but in my defense I get tense around you
Black diamond but your soul's in the hue of a sky blue
I heard a rumor through the words of a Spaniard
That you wear your soul round your heart on a lanyard
And stretch minds like suspenders of nerds with your fine words
Maybe Kel can relate if you took him on a dinner date
And miracles of science provide the orange bliss
Of a tangerine served on an orange soda flavored dish plate
And thank God for your brown eyes
Bless your momma but no love for azul, why?
Cuz I love the African in your proud veins
Moving blood to a heart like Bruce Wayne’s
I know it’s rude and I guess that I’m a wise guy
Gentleman, but I wonder what's your bra size?
Man, I guess cuz I’m a damn man
But understand if I can its my plan to be your number 1 fan
Like a groupie at a rock show, or a Rican singing J. Lo
Your beauty comes together like one plus nine
Fine, I guess that makes sense, huh?
A DIME-ond, I guess that makes cents, huh?
Did you see how I implied that you’re a 10?
I would’ve loved to see the very moment when
God created you, then maybe I’d have a rhyme or a clue
To solving the mystery that’s you.
You…you fighter shining brighter than the most brilliant of lighters
Might her soul have been bred/bread from a different place?
In the upperCRUST of our outer space?
You know I’ve thought something stupider
Maybe you’re just visiting from Jupiter…
I think I found the right timing
To put a stop to this silly rhyming
But I will say with the authority of Simon
I love me a big Black Diamond