ronnie's official rhyme scheme/multisyllable/technical/lyrical/comparison/appreciation thread

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Nothing technically spectacular about this verse (although it does have some nice multi's), but it's just really good narrative song writing (it transcends the genre in fact):

3rd verse "say goodbye to hollywood"

I don't wanna quit, but shyt, I feel like this is it
For me to have this much appeal like this, is sick
This is not a game, this fame, in real life this is sick
Publicity stunt my ass, conceal my fukking dikk
fukk the guns, I'm done, I'll never look at gats
If I scrap, I'll scrap like I ain't never whupped some ass
I love my fans, but no one ever puts a grasp
On the fact I've sacrificed everything I have
I never dreamt I'd get to the level that I'm at
This is wack, this is more than I ever could of asked
Everywhere I go, a hat, a sweater hood or mask
What about math, how come I wasn't ever good at that?
It's like the boy in the bubble, who never could adapt
I'm trapped, if I could go back, I never woulda rapped
I sold my soul to the devil I'll never get it back
I just wanna leave this game with level head intact
Imagine going from being a no one to seeing
Everything blow up and all you did was just grow up emceeing
It's fukking crazy, cause all I wanted was to give Hailie
The life I never had, instead I forced us to live alienated so I'm saying
 
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It's not technically impressive because Eminem is white.

Only post lyrics from black rappers, please
 
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the rhyme king said:
the multisyllable rhyme scheme was sick

I came to save these new generations of babies
from parents who failed to raise 'em cause they're lazy
to grow to praise me I'm makin 'em go crazy
That's how I got this whole nation to embrace me
And you fugazi if you think I'ma admit wrong
I cripple any hypocritic critic I'm sic'd on
And this song is for any kid who gets picked on
A sick song to retaliate to, and it's called..
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You don't know what a Multi is do
you?
 
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the rhyme king said:
eminem was spitting fire on that.


[Eminem]
If I could capture the rage of today's youth and bottle it
Crush the glass from my bare hands and swallow it
Then spit it back in the faces of you racists
and hypocrites who think the same shyt but don't say shyt
You Liberace's, Versace's, and you nazis
Watch me, cause you thinking you got me in this hot seat
You motherfukkers wanna JUDGE me cause you're NOT me
You'll never STOP me, I'm TOP speed as you POP me
I came to save these new generations of babies
from parents who failed to raise 'em cause they're lazy
to grow to praise me I'm makin 'em go crazy
That's how I got this whole nation to embrace me
And you fugazi if you think I'ma admit wrong
I cripple any hypocritic critic I'm sic'd on
And this song is for any kid who gets picked on
A sick song to retaliate to, and it's called..
Click to expand...

:wow: at the multis
 
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ROFLOCO said:
Nothing technically spectacular about this verse (although it does have some nice multi's), but it's just really good narrative song writing (it transcends the genre in fact):

3rd verse "say goodbye to hollywood"

I don't wanna quit, but shyt, I feel like this is it
For me to have this much appeal like this, is sick
This is not a game, this fame, in real life this is sick
Publicity stunt my ass, conceal my fukking dikk
fukk the guns, I'm done, I'll never look at gats
If I scrap, I'll scrap like I ain't never whupped some ass
I love my fans, but no one ever puts a grasp
On the fact I've sacrificed everything I have
I never dreamt I'd get to the level that I'm at
This is wack, this is more than I ever could of asked
Everywhere I go, a hat, a sweater hood or mask
What about math, how come I wasn't ever good at that?
It's like the boy in the bubble, who never could adapt
I'm trapped, if I could go back, I never woulda rapped
I sold my soul to the devil I'll never get it back
I just wanna leave this game with level head intact
Imagine going from being a no one to seeing
Everything blow up and all you did was just grow up emceeing
It's fukking crazy, cause all I wanted was to give Hailie
The life I never had, instead I forced us to live alienated so I'm saying
Click to expand...

the rhyme scheme was ridiculous imo.
 
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