Essential Official post your piff for critique/comments/stunting thread

[DBR]

my last beat

 

[Looty]

my last beat

Bangs my nikka

 

[DBR]

Thanks breh

 

[Kaypain]

My first attempt at rapping, I'm the first rapper.

I wrote the hook, and made the beat.

I think my verse is trash but shyt people in my city rock to this song so I don't know

 

[GeraldJohanssen]

My first video...

I made the beat and wrote all of the lyrics.

It's only a little 1 verse/hook thing, but let me know. Any constructive criticism on everything would be cool. I know the video's choppy and what not. We filmed and edited it all in one day.

 

[Kaypain]

My first video...

I made the beat and wrote all of the lyrics.

It's only a little 1 verse/hook thing, but let me know. Any constructive criticism on everything would be cool. I know the video's choppy and what not. We filmed and edited it all in one day.

I like the beat, your lyrics are good alsoI like the concept of the video

I just think you should bring more energy to it, like more emphasis, move around a little, get into it. Hype sells my brother, look at Wocka Flocka, nikka can't rap to save his life but his energy and hype is what gets most people into his music.

Not saying you should be like him, or rap like him or saying he's a better rapper than you. Im just saying you got to put out that image like you're enjoying this shyt, you're enjoying sitting on that tv and rapper, you're in that zone, but in my opinion I'm not seeing that, you look like you're bored no offense, hope thats some good advice.

Good piff tho, keep it up, I make beats too, if you want to collab, just hit me up

 

[SymbolicOne09]

My first video...

I made the beat and wrote all of the lyrics.

It's only a little 1 verse/hook thing, but let me know. Any constructive criticism on everything would be cool. I know the video's choppy and what not. We filmed and edited it all in one day.

I like it... but Like @Kaypain said i think you need more energy as far as the video is concerned anyway.

The beat is and lyrics are on point.

the whole hat- switch thing is cool , just keep doing you and youll be on your way

 

[Looty]

Gotta give my nikka Young Jones some love

aye @Kaypain , didn't you shot this video?

 

[Kaypain]

Breh, we smoked like 6 blunts and killed a fifth of Hennesy...

shoot that shyt on my iPhone

 

[Deafheaven]

my first try at some trap shyt

https://soundcloud.com/rns-zeu/pretty-bytch

 

[Buckeye Fever]

Funny ass beat I made on my galaxy tablet in my car in the park

http://m.soundcloud.com/midwestbreh/the-release-wav-1

 

[Ian1362]

two shyts im working on right now, top piff is what i've got done today, second one has been sitting since semester started waiting to get finished

 

[KushSkywalker]

two shyts im working on right now, top piff is what i've got done today, second one has been sitting since semester started waiting to get finished

that samples ill in the first one

 

[KenSon]

My first video...

I made the beat and wrote all of the lyrics.

It's only a little 1 verse/hook thing, but let me know. Any constructive criticism on everything would be cool. I know the video's choppy and what not. We filmed and edited it all in one day.

It's cool maine. The beats a little boring so it's hard to have an opinion on this track overall.

I agree with @Kaypain too. Not enough energy in this one. Solid tho.

 

[KenSon]

two shyts im working on right now, top piff is what i've got done today, second one has been sitting since semester started waiting to get finished

Ay that top one is gas. Second one is ill too. That boom bap sound mayne, I'm feelin' it a lot. That's my kinda shyt.