Just rereleased a my latest video with a different editing, which is better?

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kevlar kohleone said:
What would u change 2 make it more visually pleasing
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No offense but the angle that's used for the majority of it is trash. It causes your entire face to not be visible due to shadows. That should only be used in a more controlled environment or more equipment to block out some of the sun. Bad choice of beat to get traction with since it's so well known and the original they killed it.

The video can't decide what it wants to be. From the grimy graphics to movie clips to old school footage of you rapping to childhood pictures to trying to give off baller, the theme is all over the place. Plus they don't really match with the lyrics being spit. I'd say pick one direction and hammer that home.

Lastly for a 2 minute track you can't have 30 seconds of it be an intro. You're an unknown so it's best to get to the rapping and show off your talent.

Rapping wise I enjoyed it. You flowing ya ass off and you got lyrical talent.
 
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threattonature said:
No offense but the angle that's used for the majority of it is trash. It causes your entire face to not be visible due to shadows. That should only be used in a more controlled environment or more equipment to block out some of the sun. Bad choice of beat to get traction with since it's so well known and the original they killed it.

The video can't decide what it wants to be. From the grimy graphics to movie clips to old school footage of you rapping to childhood pictures to trying to give off baller, the theme is all over the place. Plus they don't really match with the lyrics being spit. I'd say pick one direction and hammer that home.

Lastly for a 2 minute track you can't have 30 seconds of it be an intro. You're an unknown so it's best to get to the rapping and show off your talent.

Rapping wise I enjoyed it. You flowing ya ass off and you got lyrical talent.
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u a tough critic I get the heavy shadow in the face part & maybe even the beat which is subjective & it’s a freestyle but the imagery that ties in with the lyrics I think is spot on. Listen again
 
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Hit up this guy and ask for a collabo. He's also an aspiring rapper. Just tell him that someone recommended you to him.
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straightcash said:
Hit up this guy and ask for a collabo. He's also an aspiring rapper. Just tell him that someone recommended you to him.
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ATG Sheed

ATG Sheed's music resonates with authenticity and raw emotion. He has a natural talent for weaving intricate narratives that paint vivid pictures of his life, from the challenges he faced growing up in Miami to the dreams and aspirations that drive him forward. His ability to connect with...
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