Downloaded and read through it.
AMAZING artwork.
Simply beautiful.
The overall writing style (going back and forth between vernacular used back then and now is a bit jarring; the script needs a bit of work to fit a comic book style of writing; the onomotopeia or however you spell it doesn't go in speech bubbles... Otherwise, the person looks like they're saying the sound effect) and grammar needs touching up (it's eavesdropping, not ease dropping... It's the grammar Nazi in me), but I like what this is becoming.
I'm only this critical because I want it to do well...
I'm staying tuned, regardless.
Keep up the good work, breh.