Finally got my Soundcloud up!

[MenacingMonk]

Props. I know how the first track is

I thought I'm Coming is better, but the timing on some bars of the second verse is so-so. First verse I thought I did all right.

I'ma re-do the first track and repost it again so I can get feedback.

 

[MenacingMonk]

All right, I redid the TFTG track.

The first verse I had memorized so I didn't read from my notebook. Second one I did. Thoughts? It definitely sounds better than the first, but I need other perspectives.

 

[Camammal]

All right, I redid the TFTG track.

The first verse I had memorized so I didn't read from my notebook. Second one I did. Thoughts? It definitely sounds better than the first, but I need other perspectives.

thats a bit better, keep practicing breh... One thing i noted at the end of the track around the 1:50 mark that your talking/calm voice is a million times better than your rapping voice. You should incorporate that into your style because im noticing you're throwing your voice way too hard making the verses sound incomprehensible and crammed. Its all about being calm and feeling the tempo, being explosive on every track doesn't work.

 

[MenacingMonk]

thats a bit better, keep practicing breh... One thing i noted at the end of the track around the 1:50 mark that your talking/calm voice is a million times better than your rapping voice. You should incorporate that into your style because im noticing you're throwing your voice way too hard making the verses sound incomprehensible and crammed. Its all about being calm and feeling the tempo, being explosive on every track doesn't work.

I don't know if you peeped "A Moment," "MusicMania," "Story of Sorrow" or "Soldier," but that's how I come out on those tracks. I'm just trying to be versatile.

For me, some beats I feel like coming out hard while another would come out calm. For instance, I originally did the "I'm Coming" track with another dude. He came out soft and calm while I went hard on it. That track never made the light. lol