Finally got my Soundcloud up!

[MenacingMonk]

Feedback is mucho appreciated. If you like , if you don't

EDIT: In case you don't read the profile, I'm not mastering my tracks.

 

[Camammal]

well, ill give my honest opinion. Its abit rough, you go off beat quite a lot but im sure you'll get better with time. Your vocals is overpowering the track as well, don't fight the beat breh flow with it.

 

[MenacingMonk]

Did it sound like that on all the tracks?

 

[Camammal]

Most if not all of them, im just skimming through them but its definitely some technical issues with the vocals without going into too many details. You gotta rethink your mastery, Its sounds very muffled...but thats the least of the problems imo. Like i said your flows for the most part off beat, delivery is lacking...that is your priority breh. Also the ad-libs and layering needs work, they're sloppy. You remind me of silk the shocker back in the day lol no offense but for doing your thing, i hope to see you improve with time. Im no rapper but i would definitely start off with some boom bap joints, those beats seems to work against your style.

 

[MenacingMonk]

I'm sure you didn't read my profile, but I'm not mastering my tracks. I don't have the dough for equipment, so I'm keeping it raw.

What's up with the delivery? Do I sound like I'm not into it?

It could be cuz of the vocals, but I do know I need to work on my delivery over certain beats.

 

[Ghpstface]

this nikka said silkk tha shocker

 

[Ghpstface]

im gonna listen when I get back to my computer ...

 

[MenacingMonk]

I never heard Shocker's shyt so I'm

 

[Camammal]

I'm sure you didn't read my profile, but I'm not mastering my tracks. I don't have the dough for equipment, so I'm keeping it raw.

What's up with the delivery? Do I sound like I'm not into it?

It could be cuz of the vocals, but I do know I need to work on my delivery over certain beats.

it does not sound like your putting effort into it. Sounds like reading off a sheet of paper and rambling over the beats, but yea delivery is definitely your priority imo. The ad-libs takes it over the top, i would stop using those for now until you get better equipment.

 

[Chubbs]

[ame]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FaYiX8B5n3I[/ame]
[ame]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=p99EIbi6DIY[/ame]
[ame]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_PDBKR7Ib-U[/ame]

 

[MenacingMonk]

it does not sound like your putting effort into it. Sounds like reading off a sheet of paper and rambling over the beats, but yea delivery is definitely your priority imo. The ad-libs takes it over the top, i would stop using those for now until you get better equipment.

Yea, that's my prob. My mentor told be about that. I'll definitely practice. Thanks for the feedback.

 

[MenacingMonk]

Anymore feedback? What I need work on? There's 90 views and only 1 person replied.

 

[bigwalt]

voice sounds like it could be dope once you polish up, just slow it down a little so you dont rush your words or cram them together...

if you cant get all your words out clearly you probably have to take a word or to out of your line..... to make it fit the beat.... flow is all about spacing your words out evenly
so you can get a symetrical cadence..

 

[LauderdaleBoss]

I just listened to a couple tracks, (I'm Coming, Thoughts from the God)

and I can see how the other dude would think of Silk Da Shocker.

Your delivery and flow is what you need to work on the most. You kinda cram too many worlds into some of your bars so it kinda makes you go off beat. It makes you sound like you have to play catch up so that's why some of your lines aren't hitting like they should. Your lyrics were straight and your voice wasn't bad. Just get ya delivery and flow on point an that will enhance everything else.

 

[PUT IN WORK]

I just listened to a couple tracks, (I'm Coming, Thoughts from the God)

and I can see how the other dude would think of Silk Da Shocker.

Your delivery and flow is what you need to work on the most. You kinda cram too many words into some of your bars so it kinda makes you go off beat. It makes you sound like you have to play catch up so that's why some of your lines aren't hitting like they should. Your lyrics were straight and your voice wasn't bad. Just get ya delivery and flow on point an that will enhance everything else.

@H.R. Puff-N-Bluntz Just listen to about 5 of your joints. Everything Lauderdale boss is my feedback. Keep at it