Brehs, what wording in this sentence is better?>

[Ohene]

I would love an opportunity to meet with you in person to discuss the intricacies of investment management @ _______ among other things, and perhaps build a relationship leading to a career or internship down the road.

OR

I would love an opportunity to meet with you in person to discuss the intricacies of investment management @ _______ among other things, and perhaps build a relationship that leads to a career or internship down the road.

I prefer the latter...my brother the former

 

[MAKAVELI25]

I would love an opportunity to meet with you in person to discuss the intricacies of investment management @ _______ among other things, and perhaps build a relationship leading to a career or internship down the road.

OR

I would love an opportunity to meet with you in person to discuss the intricacies of investment management @ _______ among other things, and perhaps build a relationship that leads to a career or internship down the road.

I prefer the latter...my brother the former

The latter. Tell your brother to stay in school

 

[Ohene]

thanks, eagles breh